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come round one afternoon and we'll
take a walk down by the lakeside,
counting invisible ducks and
throwing sticks to fish who
aren't there.
we'll see who can climb the highest
up the tree in the manor grounds.
you'll win of course,
and i'll be too scared and
graze my hands on the way down.
we can go back to my house
(don't worry, noone's home)
and warm our hands
and noses
on the radiator.
we'll burn our mouths drinking tea through straws.
later we can brave the cold
for hours.
we don't like being inside for too long.
we'll wander through the dark, me clutching
at your jacket.
taking the music with us to deafen the
silence.
we'll joke about how we're not good for each other,
cause you radiate paranoia
and we're both big cowards.
©2008-2010 ~fiwen30
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I was always one for writing bad poetry.

Forgive me, this time?

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I love the way this is written, and how t uses we and not I. It's so sweet and beautiful.. I love it.

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c a n y o u n a m e a h e r d?.........................
........c.h.e.c.k.m.y.j.o.u.r.n.a.l.....................well?
c a n y o u l i k e t h e h o r s e?....................
.......w.h.y.d.o.n.t.y.o.u.f.i.n.d.o.u.t.............well?
:iconfiwen30:
Thankyou, the kind words mean a lot :) It's bittersweet I guess. Poetic therapy is good.

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Not quite contrary.

Icon made by *BronzeHalo
:iconscouting-for-stars:
Oh yes..

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c a n y o u n a m e a h e r d?.........................
........c.h.e.c.k.m.y.j.o.u.r.n.a.l.....................well?
c a n y o u l i k e t h e h o r s e?....................
.......w.h.y.d.o.n.t.y.o.u.f.i.n.d.o.u.t.............well?
:icontuesday-m:
This is adorable, I love it :)

we'll see who can climb the highest
up the tree in the manor grounds.
you'll win of course,
and i'll be too scared and
graze my hands on the way down.


This is my favourite bit :)
Thank you, you've inspired me to write something new :)

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Of course I am special, I am Spikey!

I have wroten! FEEL MY WRATH!
:iconfiwen30:
Thanks for the kind words :hug: It was really fun to write and I'm glad to know that people enjoy reading it :) I'm also glad I inspired you! :giggle:

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Not quite contrary.

Icon made by *BronzeHalo
:icontuesday-m:
No problem. You can really tell that you enjoyed writing it.
At least, it looks like something I would enjoy writing :P

My inspiration kinda ran out a few seconds later ;) But still, I will get around to being inspired soon I am sure :)

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Of course I am special, I am Spikey!

I have wroten! FEEL MY WRATH!
:iconfiwen30:
Heh. Well I hope you get your inspiration back soon! :XD:

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Not quite contrary.

Icon made by *BronzeHalo
:icontuesday-m:
Well I found some inspiration :P
I guess its up to you to decide if it was worth the search ;)

OH hey, last day of NaNoWriMo. Did you win? Do you think you will? (I failed!)

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Of course I am special, I am Spikey!

I have wroten! FEEL MY WRATH!
:iconejectionletter:
it isn't bad poetry:

we'll joke about how we're not good for each other,
cause you radiate paranoia
and we're both big cowards.


! (: that made me smile.

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